"I have to write a paper on the person
I most admire. I picked Magic Johnson. The teacher said to make
sure that I explain the reasons why I admire him."
eact to each paragraph
."These are the paragraphs I have written.
I'll read them to make sure that they're related to my topic."
person I most admire is Magic Johnson. The reason for this
is that he is a famous basketball player who admitted that
he was HIV positive. He was at the top of his career when
he announced this.
that he contracted the virus because he was promiscuous. He
has a wife and child but they are not HIV positive. He is
also the sixth of 10 children. His announcement showed that
AIDS was not a gay disease. He was not afraid of being called
dedicated his life to educating people about AIDS. After his
announcement, he continued to play basketball for a while.
When he couldn't play anymore, he went into business. He owns
a chain of movie theatres. He also is active in causes like
the United Negro College Fund.
played basketball, he and Larry Bird were competitors. They
were always being compared to each other.
shows that it is possible to overcome illness and be successful.
He played for Michigan State when he was in college and then
he played for the L.A. Lakers. He has been a model for many
people who have problems in their lives.
"All the paragraphs seem to be related
to the topic of why I admire Magic Johnson except the paragraph
that tells about Magic and Larry Bird. That's not related to the
topic so I'll drop that paragraph."
xamine each sentence in each
"I've looked at all the sentences
in each paragraph. There's only one sentence that doesn't fit the
topic. It's the sentence in the second paragraph that says that
Magic was the sixth of 10 children. I'm going to drop that sentence."
"The last paragraph introduces some
new information. The sentence that says that he played for Michigan
State and the L.A. Lakers really isn't necessary so I'll take it